3 claims w/ a supporting fact for each
1.) Claim: The artist supports hunting, and believes that hunters should be proud when they kill, and will get women by hunting.
Supporting fact: The stance of the boy is proud, and his girlfriend is embracing him.
2.) Claim: The young boy wishes to be a hunter as well, and wants to carry a big gun. He pretends his large stick is a gun.
Supporting fact: He has joined the boy and his girlfriend on the hunting trip, and carries a stick as big as the boy's gun.
3.) Claim: The artist thinks that older people are who teach younger people to be violent, and the older boy is teaching the younger boy to live a violent life.
Supporting fact: The young boy has come along with the older boy on the hunting trip.
Paragraph: The young boy wishes to be a hunter, just as the older male is, and wishes to carry a gun as big as the young man's. This is demonstrated both by the fact that he's carrying a large stick and that he came with the young man and woman on the hunting trip. Young boys like to use sticks and pretend that they're guns, so the young boy in this picture was probably pretending that his large stick was like the older boy's gun, seeing as how they are about the same size. Also, since he came on the hunting trip with the young couple, the young boy either has no issues with watching the older boy kill a deer, or is trying to learn how to do such a thing, and has a desire to emulate the young man's actions.
Very nice job making claims. Remember that you don't use a comma with the conjunction if what follows the conjunction is a dependent clause.
ReplyDelete"He has joined the boy and his girlfriend on the hunting trip, and carries a stick as big as the boy's gun."